Diseased

Darkness falls
the end is near
the muffled calls
are becoming clear

Slice your wrists!
They bid me on.
They don’t exist
but my sanity’s gone.

I can’t decide
what's real or not.
The voices inside,
control my lot.

I grab a knife
cold and sharp.
To take my life,
and escape the dark.

The voices tease
as my blood flows.
They were a disease
that no one will know.

Suicidal schizophrenia is what it is....

First off... is that Russell Crowe in your sigpic? Or is it like one of the Hanson brothers crossed with Russell Crowe? Who is that?

Secondly, you rhyme with a 98% accuracy. Even Flava Flave would envy that. And if you don't know who Flava Flave is... well.... proceed with the plan in your poem.

OK.. the real review. No normally, I like to laugh at people who write on this topic, but i must say that you did a pretty fine job. It wasn't too long, so that is a nice chnage. Too often people will write a 20 stanza bit about suicide. I mean.. c'mon.. killing yourself is about ending your life... so freaking end the poem and get on with it. Secondly, you didn't bring love into it. Never a winning combination in my book. even the Bard gets -10 cool points for plagerizing Romeo and Juliet from every other Greek writer that he looked up to. I also like your last line. It places a sort of light touch on the end of the work. It is what it is.. nothing more. I feel that it allows the reader to not be guilted into having to like the poem simply because of the subject's nature. Damn fine job. In five stanzas you capture what most predisposed humans fill up spiral bound after spiral bound fishing for: a clean view of self induced mortality.

Keep writing!

thnkas much issue!! yeah, I write alot but its really sad when I go and re-read the crap and see that its well....crap! heh heh.. I amy post more of my stuff later, but meh.

adn the delightfully enticing man in the pic is Alan Doyle, one of the lead singers for the band Great big sea, they are from new foundland, I just love them to pieces. Absolutely divine in concert. Im a little perturbed about the mentioning of the hansen brothers, but I supose the mentioning of Russel crowe cancells it out, but only ust barely.

ha ha, oh man..the laughter. But I totally agree, by the time I fininsh reading those epic suicidal poems I'm ready to end my life!!

thanks for the review issue, stay tuned. ;)