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Sypnosis:
2,000 Years later After the Last war on The Saga of heroes Chaotic Millenia I, An Pirate/Emperor who enjoys conquering planets and dimensions, thretens to do the same to the earth and the country of Puertorico. The Three ten year old children, are the only hope for the country salvation.

Quote of the story:
"There are many stars and heroes in this world but noone of them have the Pureness and Determination that Ten year old Children have."
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Strike 1: Let’s ride on a Train of hopes! The beginning of a new era!

Two thousand years later after The Saga of heroes Chaotic Millennia I, The republic of PuertoRico has gone through a lot of changes and technological advances. Although people still don’t understand that not matter who you are or how old are you; you can get through everything if you have hope and faith! But People don’t listen!! And it’s going to take three children to make them understand that.

Our story begins on a sunny Friday afternoon on the month of November at the Lorencita Ramirez de Arellano Elementary school. Ten-year-old Melissa Ramirez Gak arrived late to school. Her best friends: Daniel Jurami Espinal and Michelle Santori Rivera were worried about Melissa because she’s never been late to class.

-Melissa is already twenty minutes late! This is not like her at all!
-Michelle, I’m sure Melissa is fine! She’s very tough!
Melissa arrived at the classroom; she immediately explained to the teacher that it wasn’t her fault that she got late. She explained that her dad’s car broke down in the middle of the road and she had to go walking.
-I don’t believe a single word of it! It sounds like a bad excuse to cover up your irresponsibility! I live in Phoenix path, ToaAlta! And I always get here on time! Why can you get here on time if you live here in metropolis?
-Haven’t you heard a single word that I said to you? My dad’s car broke down in the middle of the road!
-We will talk about this after class! Sit down in your seat.
Melissa was pissed by her teacher ignorance. She sat down behind Michelle; she threw her book bag in to the floor. She was really mad about what her teacher told her.
-Chill out! You’re going to have a Heart attack if you continue like this! Just ignore what the teacher said! We all know that you’re telling the truth!
-Michelle is right about that! Besides you’re the most responsible girl in the whole classroom. Although Diana is still the best!
-Daniel, would you shut up about Diana already?
-Don’t tell me to shut up! You shut up!
-Shut the #### up! Both of you! I really appreciate that you both are trying to get me to relax but with you two fighting I won’t be able to relax!
-Anyways, What about your dad, is he ok? What about you?
-My dad is fine; I’m fine and pissed! Thanks for asking, Daniel!
-You welcome! You’re my best friend and I care a lot about you!
-I know! You and Daniel are the best I could ever have! Thank you guys!
The teacher told the students to open their math books on page 27. They had to solve all forty seven-multiplication exercises, Melissa loved math but since she wasn’t in the mood to do any kind of Arimethic exercises she complained about the excess of work.

-Teacher! Forty-seven exercises are too much! I’m not in the mood today for doing so many math exercises and I’m sure my classmates don’t want to do so many exercises.
-Melissa Ramirez! You arrive late to class, you use pitiful excuses to save your ass, you disrespect me, and now you dare to go against my instructions? Go to the principal office!
-Nothing will make me happier!
Melissa walked out of the classroom. She was so mad that she didn’t care about any consequences this problem might bring. Both Michelle and Daniel said to the teacher that if her friend goes down, they go down as well! The teacher had no problem with that so she sent them to the principal office as well.

- Wait for us!
-Aren’t you supposed to be in class? You two should head back before the teacher sends the two to detention as well!
-We decided to be grounded as well! Michelle and I dint wanted to leave you all alone in detention.
While they talked in the middle of the halls, a train arrived to the school. Michelle was the first one to see it landing to the school courtyard and then she told Melissa and Daniel. The three of them decided to go and check it out.
In less than 2 minutes they arrived to the courtyard where the Train driver was waiting for them outside the train. He told them that their help is urgently needed and that they needed to go with him.
-Why do you want our help?
-Michelle Santori Rivera, Your destiny and the destinies of your friends are about to be revealed! Your lives will change forever after today! Come with me!
The teacher arrived at the scene and she wanted to stop the children from going
-you three aren’t going! Stay here or else!
-You can’t decide for us! We made the decision of going along with him!
- You’re a lousy liar, a spoiled brat and now a runaway? I won’t allow it!
The Train driver approached to the teacher. He was mad at the children’s teacher because she wanted to interfere.
-You cannot interfere in these children destinies!! Chains of punishment!
The Train driver used his chains of punishment attack to chain her to the ground. Birds were starting to fly in circles near her. She got desperate so she started to shout:
-Get me the hell out of here! Security! Stop that driver and the children!
The children and the train driver quickly entered the train, to make their escape before the school security staff arrives.
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Strike 2: The Children successfully escape from the school! The children arrival at Nimbo…

The Train was being followed by the Metropolis Police and the School Security Staff. Daniel was worried, because the police kept after them and they could destroy the train with their Powerful mega cannons. The train driver told them not to worry because the train is made of Gaktinonzoid a strong and rare metal that can only be found On Nimbo and can’t be destroyed with simple Mega cannons. The Police got near the train and threatened to destroy the train if they didn’t stop. Melissa got out of the train and into the roof of the train, the wind was strong, and she almost fell but she kept her balance, she shouted to the Police:
-#### you all! Let’s see you trying to destroy the train!
Michelle got out of the train as well, Grabbed Melissa by the arm and brought her back inside.
-What the hell were you doing? You could’ve been killed!
The Train driver decided to active the weapons of the train, to kill of the train. Melissa didn’t agree with that, but Daniel wanted that the train driver to kill the police. Melissa and Michelle explained that if they show any signs of aggressiveness it was going to turn things worse for them. Daniel asked to the train driver how much was remaining till they get out of earth and into Nimbo highway.
-Five minutes remain! But I’m going to make it faster!
-How are you going to do that?
-Michelle, That’s the easy thing! Let’s show them real speed! Increasing speed! 56%.
The train rapidly increased speed. The train driver told to the acolytes that now only Two minutes remain till they get out of earth. But the train driver and the acolytes weren’t the only ones with tricks of speed as they will soon see.
-Let’s increase speed! We can’t lose them!
The police officers were now evenly match with the train driver speed, and that’s when they warned the train driver. They told him that he had till the count of five to stop the train or they will shoot it down. At the same time the Train driver announced to the acolytes that only 30 seconds remained till they entered the Nimbo Highway, Pass through the celestial gates to reach the Nimbo Central express. Both sides started their countdown; it was a very tense situation for both sides.
-Thirty seconds left till we enter!
-One!
-Twenty seconds left till we enter!
-Two!
-Fifteen seconds left till we enter!
-Three!
-Ten seconds left till we enter!
-Four!
-FIVE! KILL THE TRAIN!! TAKE IT OFF THE SKIES!!
-AND ZERO! NIMBO HIGHWAY, OPEN!
The captain of the police ordered the officers to shoot the Mega cannon to destroy the train and kill the train driver, but the train was faster than their shots! They entered Nimbo highway without any problems. But the police officers were a little frustrated because they weren’t able to complete their mission.
-Officer 01 to station! Come in!
-Station we read you
-We lost the train that kidnapped the children it increased his speed at an awesome speed.
-Return to the station!
-Yes sir!
The train disappeared the destination was unknown but one thing for sure the police won't stop until they track down the train that took away the children. Meanwhile in the train the acolytes were talking to each other about their current experience.
-From detention to a flying train wanted by the police for kidnapping... What a crazy day!
-I heard the name nimbo before. I must have read something about it in some book.
-Daniel, You’re the genius here! So if you say that you have read something about it means you did. Michelle said.
The Train driver explained that Nimbo is the second heaven created by God at the beginning of times; it all was related to the Eternal Chronicles of the Saga of heroes, The Gaktianamus acolytes, the wars and the Powerful Gak family. Melissa very proudly said to Michelle and Daniel that she was part of the all powerful family, Michelle Asked her if she was joking, but Melissa replied telling her:
-Use your brains! My name is Melissa Ramirez Gak
-I never really noticed before! Sorry!
-I’m part of this Gaktianamus religion and I always heard about the acolytes and the saga of heroes!
Daniel asked to Melissa what the saga of heroes all about was, but as smart as Melissa is, this time she wasn’t able to answer Daniel’s question, because she has never read them before. Then Daniel asked her another question:
-Have you been here up here before?
She said to Daniel that she has never been on nimbo before, that this was her first time (This time she was able to answer quickly and directly.) The train stopped, meaning that they arrived at nimbo central express. The train driver gave them a welcome to nimbo.
-Children, welcome to Nimbo! Today your lives and destinies will never be the same again! Because they will completely change!
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Strike 3: The Acolytes arrive at Nimbo Main palace! The birth of the new Gaktianamus acolytes…

The children arrived at Nimbo. The train driver was explaining to them where did they have to go next. The children got off the train and they were amazed by the different world that they are now since Nimbo is very different from the earth or any dimension they could ever go to.
-Mrs. Gak, Please don’t be nervous! Your family originally came from Nimbo so you should feel like home here.
-Mr. Driver, don’t call me Mrs. Gak! I’m not really nervous! It’s just that this world is so different from any other… We survived all those attacks and we have the risk of facing detention for the remaining of this semester and next semester just to come here! I really hope it’s important!
Daniel was getting impatient; he wanted to know why they were brought all the way up to nimbo without explaining what they had to do. The train driver explained to them that they had to follow the road outside the train station and they will see a floating palace, once they arrive there, they will be teleported inside. Then Michelle asked the train driver:
-It would be easier if you came with us! I’m afraid we might get lost.
-I can’t go with you children because my mission is to drive from here to earth and some other stuff that I can’t mention right about now.
Daniel then asked him if the only thing he could do was drive, the train driver told him that this wasn’t the time to get specific and that they should get the hell out and into their road to the palace. The children started to walk towards their destination, it was their first time in Nimbo and Michelle was still afraid of getting lost.
-Are we on the right place? Michelle asked Melissa.
- I Hope we’re on the right path.
Daniel looked at his right, and saw something that looked like the palace; he pointed with his finger and said to Melissa and Michelle:
-Girls! I can see the palace that the train driver told us! See where I’m pointing over there? Let’s go!
The children ran towards their destination, they were teleported inside the palace. When they arrived they were greeted By Sika and her son Siran. Sika stills wears her golden armor and tiara and Siran just wears and golden armor.
-Welcome to my main palace!
-Nice too meet you, children! This would be the first acolyte team that I get to see receive their powers.
-My son and I are the guardians of the main palace of nimbo; we’re also the guardians of the earth and of the new Gaktianamus acolytes!
Daniel as always got impulsive and impatient again and asked why they had to go on that train. Siran explains that they been chosen to become the next generation of Gaktianamus acolytes. Then Melissa asked to both Sika and Siran:
-Is the world in danger once again? According to my mother that’s one of the main reasons they are chosen. To die for the world that god created.
-Yes is its! Siran, explain it to them!
-As you wish, mother! An emperor who rules dark dimensions and whose favorite hobby is to conquer planets, dimensions, and steal valuable stuff from them has arrived to earth and is ready to attack along with his super powerful sidekicks: “Neowolf and Woman cat”. We need you three to stop the emperor.
- Why us? Besides me that I’m a Gak, why are my friends involved in this as well?
Sika then explained that they are decedents from the Unlimited Gaktianamus acolytes. Then Michelle asked Sika if she had proof and she said that she had proof.
-Your Last names are the proof! Michelle Rivera! Daniel Espinal!
-That makes the two of you decedents from: Karla Rivera! And Ana espinal! Siran replied and finished the explanation.
-let me guess... I come from Julian Gak, right?
-Correct! That’s why my mother and I chose you and your friends! Besides the fact that you’re a Gak and have the power within you and it was already your destiny to become a Gaktianamus acolyte. For your two friends become Gaktianamus acolytes, they will need to focus their mind and prepare for the power set!
-Michelle let’s hold hands so that way we don’t get scared!
Michelle and Daniel hold hands, that way they would take easier the power set, they closed their eyes as well. Sika was ready to set their powers.
-Powers of god and Nimbo! Give these children the Gaktianamus acolyte’s powers!
The skies on Nimbo became cloudy! Michelle and Daniel were struck by a powerful lighting bolt.
-It didn’t hurt! Did you felt any pain? Daniel asked Michelle.
-Yes! And a lot of pain! My whole body hurts!
-Mother! There’s no time to waste! I can feel the emperor getting closer to earth!
Sika, explained that if they wanted to transform they just had to follow Melissa’s example since she knows how to morph perfectly. (Since she’s a Gak the style of morphing should be on her mind already ever since she came in contact with Sika and Siran.)
-Dear friends, just follow my lead! Gak acolyte powers, action!
Melissa started to glow. She was glowing color white, and her whole body was covered in a white light. When she finished her transformation sequence she said:
-Eternal light! Gaktianamus Acolyte!
-so these are the Gaktianamus acolytes you chose, mother? They’re amazing!
-You just have seen the Gak acolyte! Michelle! You’re the Water Acolyte!
-Water Acolyte powers, action!
Michelle’s whole body was covered by a whirlpool. When she finished transforming she said:
-Raging waters! Gaktianamus acolyte!
-Your water acolyte looks cute! Blue lipstick, blue eyes, blue hair and blue nails.
-Siran, is our acolytes! Daniel, you’re the nuclear acolyte!
-Nuclear acolyte powers, action!
An explosion erupted and it covered the whole transforming area in smoke. When he finished his transformation sequence was completed he said:
-Explosive force! Gaktianamus acolyte!
Siran immediately order the Gaktianamus acolytes to move out. They needed to go back on the train and head back to the school. He predicts that the emperor will start attacking from the school.
-Acolyte team, let’s go!
Melissa led her acolyte team towards the train station. She was now filled with the confidence of her powers.
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Strike 4: The children return to earth! The Gaktianamus acolytes first battle…

The Gaktianamus acolytes arrived at nimbo central express to take the train that will return them back to earth. When the train driver saw them dressed as Gaktianamus acolytes he was very surprised. As soon as he saw the children dressed as acolytes he said to them:


-I can’t believe it! You children became the Gaktianamus acolytes! That’s incredible!
-We need to get back to earth immediately! Michelle told the train driver.
-Get on the train! I’ll drive as fast as I can!
The children got on the train and the driver immediately started to drive at maximum speed, using the quickest route: “The Nimbo highway.” In less than three minutes they arrived to the school. The driver told them to undo their transformations and keep it down until the emperor arrives. The police were already waiting for them at the school. One of the officers saw the train flying over the school and notified the others. They were preparing to shoot down the train. Michelle got nervous when she saw all of the police officers and all the security staff from the school aiming their guns at them, but the train driver was really confident about the situation, so confident that he decided to land the train in the middle of the school courtyard.

-Acolytes, remember that this cannot be destroyed by simple weapons! Get out of train slowly and don’t talk about anything of the Gaktianamus stuff until the right time comes.
All the acolytes nod in agreement. The doors of the train were opening and the weapons of the police officers were charging on and ready to shoot. The acolytes got out of the train without their acolytes uniforms, but the train disappeared as fast as it came. Everybody was disappointed (Except the acolytes, of course!).
-####! The train escaped from us again!
Michelle and Daniel were laughing hard, Melissa was smiling about it, and she walked towards her teacher and said to her:
-Bad for you, Mrs. Sanchez!
- We don’t really need the train driver! I’ll leave it to the police to make you all talk! Or to your parents!
Without any fear Michelle said to the teacher that she could call her parents if she wanted. Then Melissa asked the teacher and to the police officers if they were sure that their parents, would really believe them when they tell them that they (Three Ten year old children.) went off in a train that came from another dimension and that they were away for five minutes. The teacher was a little shocked by the way the smart ass way they were acting, the police officers whispered something between them, and they turned around and said:
-This isn’t over yet, you little smartasses! Somehow, some way! You will all talk and tell us what happened!
The police officers got in their cars and went away. From the crowd that gathered a girl approached Daniel.
-Daniel Daniel!
-Hello, Diana!
Daniel started to blush and smile, he was right in front of the girl he loves the most, her name is Diana, she’s tall, has curly black hair, green eyes, and she’s thin. Even though it was obvious that Daniel had the biggest crush on Diana, she didn’t seem to notice. She’s one of their classmates, every time Daniel sees her, its like heaven to him. The only problem is that Daniel is too shy to ask her out.
-Are you all ok? Did the train driver harm any of you?
-We’re fine! Nothing happened. I’m the boy of the group so I was the bravest one!
-Did the driver tried to rape Melissa and Michelle?
Melissa quickly answered Diana’s question. She got a little mad about the question.
-No!! He didn’t rape us or even tried!! Diana, where do you get such dirty thoughts?!
Diana as always with her clueless expression of her face, pretending to be stupid, when she’s not really stupid replied to Melissa’s question.
-Ehh… I don’t know.
The teacher told to all the students to go back to their classrooms and to pretend that nothing happened here. Everyone started to return to their classes Except for Daniel, Melissa, and Michelle who are facing detention for running away and defying all authority.
-I’ll guess I’ll see you all on recess! Bye bye Daniel!
- Bye bye Diana!
-I still don’t understand what you see on that #####. Explain me why you like a girl with such dirty thoughts on her mind? Doesn’t that turn you off?
-Nah! I like her that way!
A few minutes later, a huge spaceship was approaching the school. The emperor finally arrived. Inside the ship there was a silver throne where the emperor was sitting and right by his side he had his two sidekicks: Neowolf and woman cat. They were all prepared for the invasion.
-So... this is earth?? Interesting... Meow! This planet defenseless against us! Master, you chose the perfect planet!
- Yes! Our master is a genius!
-Hehehehe! This planet is filled with weaklings’ fools! Conquering it and stealing their treasures will be easy! We shall show them no mercy!
Meanwhile outside the ship, the acolytes were wondering if that ship was the emperor that Sika and Siran talked about. That’s when the emperor came out of the ship. Michelle asked him:
-who are you?? Are you the emperor?
-Yes! I’m the emperor! And these are my allies: Neowolf and woman cat! They are half alien and half earthling animal. Now children you will be the first of my slaves!
-You don’t know who you’re messing with! Daniel exclaimed with courage and determination. There was fire in his heart, the fire of fighting for the first time for something other than himself.
-Three children aren't a threat to me! Are you the last line of defense of this planet?
-want to see? Let’s do it guys!
All the acolytes at the same time said:
Gaktianamus acolytes initiate transformation sequence!
- Gak acolyte powers, action! Eternal light! Gaktianamus Acolyte!
- Water Acolyte powers, action! Raging waters! Gaktianamus acolyte!
- Nuclear acolyte powers, action! Explosive force! Gaktianamus acolyte!
Melissa led the team, by saying the Gaktianamus acolyte’s motto.
-We are the Ultimate Generation of heroes! Destined to save this world from destruction! Together we are….
All at the same time said:
-The Gaktianamus Acolytes!
-Foolish children! Gaktianamus acolytes? I never heard of you! But I’m very sure you don’t’ stand a chance against us! Neowolf! Woman cat! Go get them!
Neowolf and woman cat attacked the children. But they were able to evade the attacks. Michelle was noticing that Neowolf and woman cat were too fast for they, so she had to try to slow them down.
-I’ll bring you both down! Water energy!
Michelle shot a blue energy blast (Water energy) to Neowolf and woman cat but they disappeared. Michelle was wondering where they went that’s when Neowolf suddenly reappeared and scratched Michelle’s face. Of her cheeks was bleeding, because of the scratch. Woman Cat and Neowolf kicked Daniel, Melissa and Michelle right at the same time, they fell to the floor.
-This was even easier than we thought! It’s time for you three to die!
- Woman cat, do you really think we’re going to keep making it easy for you? Acolyte team! Let’s do the Storm of friendship!
Daniel and Michelle had no idea what Melissa meant by “The storm of friendship”. So Daniel decided to ask Melissa what the #### is the storm of friendship. Melissa explained to them that the storm of friendship is a powerful energy blast that it’s created when they combine all of their attacks together. Michelle agreed with Melissa’s idea.
-Water energy!
-Radioactive energy! The radioactive energy blast with radioactive powers, it was one of Daniel’s basic powers.
-Light beam! The light beam is an advanced power that the Gak acolytes have. Is a strong energy blast that can destroy the entire world if the user doesn't know how to control it.
-All of our powers combined formed: “The Storm of friendship.”
Neowolf and woman cat received a strong direct hit from the attack. They fell to the floor and with their last bit of energy, they teleported back to their ship. The emperor started to applaud.
-Magnificent performance! Whoever... It’s not enough!
-You’re next!!
-Melissa! Wait!!
The emperor using his high speed power; evaded all of Melissa’s punches, kicks and energy blasts, After Melissa’s attacks failed, the emperor quickly disappeared and reappeared behind her, shooting her with one of his energy blasts.
-Dark blast!!
-Ahh!!
Melissa fell to the ground, Scratching her face and arms. Daniel and Michelle quickly checked on Melissa to see if she was all right.
-Are you ok? Did you break any bones?
- I just got a few bruises but everything else is all right. Thanks for asking, Michelle.
- Your battle skills suck! We will battle again another time!
-There isn’t going to be a next time! This battle is far from over!! Daniel exclaimed.
-But we will battle again! But I’m going to make things more interesting by offering you all something worth fighting.
In that very moment Diana was downstairs walking and that’s when the emperor grabbed her.
-AHHH!!! LET ME GO!!! SOMEONE HELP ME!! PLEASE LET ME GO!!!
Diana was shouting in fear, She was scared to death. The emperor used his hostage teleportation technique to teleport her to his ship.
-Diana!!! NO!! That bastard took Diana! He needs to be killed!
The emperor used his hostage teleportation technique to teleport her to his ship.
I just teleported her to my ship where she will stay until the next time that I come back! Consider this a warning; if you win against me she will be free! But if the results are the same as today I will kill her! Or shall I rape her? I’m undecided!
Daniel got mad; he couldn’t stand the emperor arrogance. So he immediately flied towards the emperor to attack him.
-Don’t be a fool! Super gust!
-Ah!!!!
Daniel fell to the ground, falling on Michelle and Melissa. The emperor said goodbye to the acolytes and disappeared along with his ship.
-Diana! Diana! Damn! He got away! That bastard took her away!!
-We know that, but could you get off our backs now so we can stand up?
-oops! Sorry about that, Melissa.
A masked man wearing all white with a star symbol on his uniform said to the acolytes:
-You Gaktianamus acolytes are clueless!
Daniel stood up, steeping on Michelle and Melissa and asked to the man:
-Who the hell are you?

wow. its a bit of read, but its very good

Pegasus told me to say to you, Thanks

Damn didn't kno u can write, im probly the only one who rly read it, *like to read, only thing i do like in school* anyway nice nice, i do like it, u got good idea's my friend, anyway blu tell peggy good job on this story.

Nah, I read it too. Good story peggy keep it coming =]

Wow, I found this topic. Anyway let me continue from where I left it.
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Strike 5: Diana can still be saved! The Acolytes need to train hard to defeat the enemy.


-Who the hell I’m am, you asked? I’m white star from the star religion!
-Do you have powers like us? Melissa asked to white star
-Yes, I do! I’m stronger than you three combined! This battle was below average! I seen monkeys fight better than you children.
-You better take that back!! Or I will make you eat some nuclear power!
-I’ll let you try! Fight me!
-Don’t do it! Daniel, White star looks stronger than you! I don’t think he’s bluffing!
-I’m sure he is! Daniel replied to Melissa’s comment.
-If you are so sure, then come and get me!
-As you wish! Nuclear punch!
White star grabbed him by the neck. Daniel was a little scared of white star, even though he didn’t admit, White star asked him:
-Is that your best shot? Does my awesome strength scares you?
-I’m not scared of some idiot wearing Taliban like clothing!
White star threw Daniel to the floor. He drew his sword.
-Don’t kill him!! Melissa shouted.
-I won’t kill him! Power breaker!!
He shot a small energy blast to Daniel that deactivated his powers. Daniel thought his powers were destroyed so he asked to white star:
-What did you do to my powers? Did you destroy them?
-I didn’t! I just forced them to deactivate them!
-Daniel, I told you that he wasn’t lying when he said that he was stronger than the three of us combined!
-Stay out of this! –Daniel replied to Michelle’s comment.
-You’re all going to be surprised that I work for Nimbo as well! I came to inspect your battle. You need serious training! Fast and hard training!
-Are you going to be our trainer? Melissa asked.
-Siran and Sika sent me here to train you three of you! Once I’m through with you three, you will all become great acolytes.
-what does the training consists? Daniel asked.
-Meet me here at 8:30P.M! The training is even more effective at night.
-Why is that? Can we start training now?
-Michelle, I know what I’m doing! I want you all here at 8:30P.M!
White star disappeared.
-He’s gone! That bastard never answered my question!
-Guys, let’s go home! We need to rest!
-Yeah, I bet that White Star has an extreme training for us tonight. Michelle replied
-Melissa, this is your brightest idea that you had in the whole day!
-Shut up, Daniel!

They went to their homes to the rest. A few hours passed, it was already 8:30P.M. The acolytes arrived in time. When they arrived White star wasn’t there so they started to look for him, and he appeared a couple of minute’s later, right behind their backs.
-I’m here!
The Acolytes got scared a little bit, because White star suddenly appeared without making any kind of noise. White star was glad that they were all transformed already, but Daniel was getting impatient he wanted to train already.
-Let’s cut the crap! Go to the point!
-Daniel, your first training will be underwater!
-There’s no water here! Haven’t you noticed yet?
-Daniel, I noticed very well! But I have some tricks of my own!
The school courtyard started to flood with water. White star was turning the school courtyard into a Lake. The conversion was completed.
-We’re underwater! And we can breathe and talk!
-You finally noticed, Michelle!
What do we have to do? Melissa asked
-I hid three orbs! The orb of chaos, the orb of life and the orb of the forest! Your mission is to split up and find each one of the orbs and bring it back to me.
-This is going to be easy! Daniel exclaimed.
-Do you really think that I would make your lives any easier? There are traps everywhere!
-Oh ####! What kind of traps?
-Melissa, that’s something you will discover on your own when you start looking for the orbs! You all have five minutes to bring it back to me!
-Each acolyte started to search for the orbs. But their training will be full of traps. On the other side of the water, Melissa spotted a cave so she decided to enter it. When she was about to enter, five sharks came out of it and started to attack Melissa.
Sharks!! But this time I’m not afraid of you, since I have powers that kill you all! Energy blast!!
The sharks evaded their attacks. One of the sharks bited Melissa on her leg and she was bleeding badly.
-Let go of me!! Cutting light!
With her cutting light attack she cut the shark in half. The other sharks started to bite her in different parts of her body.
-Enough of these sharks thinking that I’m their dinner! Explosion of the light!
She used her explosion of the light attack. That huge explosion caused by her powers killed all the sharks and there was nothing left of them, only their blood.
-I’m badly bleeding! I better get that orb!
Melissa swam quickly towards the cave. She entered and retrieved the orb of life.
-The orb is glowing! And it’s healing my wounds! It’s time to return it to white star!
Meanwhile, A few miles from where Melissa was, Daniel was looking for the next orb.
-I have been swimming for awhile and I haven’t seen any traps! White star was bluffing as always!
Five Octopuses appeared in front of Daniel, they were ready to attack.
-Crap! They surrounded me!
The octopus started to shot laser beams to Daniel. Then they slapped him with their tentacles! He was left in a critical condition.
-They are going to kill me if I don’t stop them! Radiation blast!!
Wth a full blast of radiation, the octopuses were killed. There was nothing left of them.
- better hurry up and find the orb before more monsters appear!
Daniel was looking around for the orb; he still couldn’t find it, until he saw something shining in the ground. He grabbed it and when he took a close look to it, he noticed that it was the orb of chaos.
-This is the orb of chaos! The power of this orb can give me all the power I need to save Diana! I do not need to go through some stupid training!
White star appeared in front of Daniel.
-What the hell are you thinking? You can’t just tap into the power of the orb! Unless you know how to control it, the power will kill you!
-That’s bullshit! I’m the nuclear acolyte! I can control this power!
-Give me that orb!
White star took the orb of chaos from Daniel’s hands.
Hey! Give it back!
-I know that you like that little #####! but you can’t let your feelings get in the way of your real mission! Your Mission is to save the world and her!
-Don’t call her a #####! She’s the girl I like and I won’t allow you to call her names!
-You can’t even control your emotions! And do you really expect that you can save her?
-Maybe you’re right... maybe you aren’t!
The Other Acolytes arrived.
-I got the orb of life!
-I got the orb of forest!
-I got the orb of chaos!
-You have passed your speed, smartness and strength training! You all got badly wounded in the process but you gained valuable strength and experience! You are all ready to face the threat ahead of you.
-Do you think we have a chance at defeating the emperor? –Michelle asked.
-If you remember everything you learned about this training and you believe in god and in the power of your hearts, there’s nothing that you can’t do!
The water levels came down. Everything was dry as if anything never happened.
-Why is the courtyard so dry? Is impossible! The school looked like a lake!
-There’s a simple answer for that, Melissa. The water and the monsters were all simulations created by me and Siran.
-They were holograms? They looked real, the wounds felt real, the pain felt real and the water felt real!
-Melissa, the combined powers of Siran and me created the most powerful simulation and training ever!
-Now that we finished with our training, can we go now?
-Yes, Daniel, you all can return home now!
The Acolytes returned to their homes. They went straight to their beds, they were tired after a tough night of hard training. The lessons they learned in this training, they will need them to defeat the emperor and rescue Diana.

Strike 6: Zombies at the school! The acolyte’s toughest decision

Three days had passed since their training (It was Monday morning.) and the acolytes felt even stronger and ready to take on the emperor and rescue Diana. But it won’t be as easy as they think it’s going to be. The emperor was gone and he didn’t left any trace of where he was headed, Making it to the acolytes almost impossible to find his ship.
-Where do we start? We need to find first the location of the emperor!
-Melissa, that’s the easiest task! My heart will guide me towards Diana!
That’s so corny! Michelle exclaimed.
-Shut up! I don’t see the corny on it, Michelle!
-Shut the #### up! Concentrate on the task that you all have ahead!
-Calm down, White star! We were working on that!
-Then work faster! It won’t be long before the emperor gets bored about this world and decides to leave with Diana. Or if he gets bored, destroys the world, and takes Diana with him to his next conquer.
(Neowolf appeared on the school roof.)
-Looking for us?
-It’s Neowolf! Daniel exclaimed.
-Neowolf, Where is Diana?!
-Gak Acolyte, That’s something that you can’t know yet!
-I’ll kill you! You are messing with the girl I love! You better don’t do anything to her!
-If you kill me, you won’t get your answers!
-He’s got a point there! White star said to Daniel.
-I came to give you all a little gift you might enjoy! Smoke bombs of the haunted!
Neowolf threw special smoke bombs to the acolytes.
-Watch out, everybody! Melissa exclaimed.
-Star Shield!!
White star used his star shield to protect the acolytes from the Smoke bombs of the haunted.
-Gaktianamus Acolytes, are you all okay?
The three acolytes replied at the same time:
-Yes, we are! Thanks for protecting us!
-This is all for now! Bye, bye! Gaktianamus Acolytes!
Neowolf disappeared right after the smoke cleared up. It was kind of weird for him to throw some smoke bombs and leave without at least trying to kill the acolytes.
-Why he didn’t attack us? Why throw smoke bombs? Daniel asked.
White look behind him and when he saw what those smoke bombs really did, he alerted the acolytes.
-Acolytes, you might want to take a look at your classmates!
All the children were turning into zombies and they were screaming in pain. Not all the children had a successful transformation from human to zombies, those who failed died.
-I don’t like this! This is not the time to have more enemies!
-Acolytes, I don’t think you can turn them back into human children!
-We can’t turn them back?! Daniel asked to white star
-They’re approaching us and they look really angry! I think you might need to kill them all! Transform! Now!
-Nuclear acolyte powers, action!
-Gak acolyte powers, action!
-Water acolyte powers, action!
All acolytes at the same time said:


-Gaktianamus Acolytes!


Some zombies appeared from underground and they grabbed white star legs.
-Ah! Let me go! Stupid children!
White star killed the zombies that grabbed him. He used his sword to slice their arms. They were bleeding badly like a pipe when it’s breaks. It was a very gross and horrible moment.
-Those two girls were my friends! And what you did was gross! I feel like throwing up….
Tough luck, Melissa! They aren’t your friends anymore! Shape up and continue to kill!
-White star is right! They’re the servants of the emperor! Daniel said to Melissa.
Some zombies jumped on Daniel’s back and he killed them using his nuclear radiation. They were melted. Meanwhile, another pack of zombies was ready to attack Michelle.
-I hate doing this! Bubbles blast!!
The Zombies were trapped in explosive bubbles that exploded at exactly one minute from the capture.
-Forgive me for this, Joshua!
Michelle’s friend exploded in pieces.
Michelle’s started to stare at her hands, her hands were covered with the blood of the innocent children, tears were starting to come out of her eyes, she said to herself:
-My hands are stained with the blood of the innocent! With the blood of the innocent that were gotten involved into our mess.
-This is not the time to get dramatic, Michelle!
-White star, let’s just combine our powers and give them a quick and honorable death to my friends!
-As you wish, Melissa! Star blast!
-Water energy!
-Radioactive energy!
-Light beam!
Melissa used the storm of friendship blast on the zombies. They were all killed with one quick shot.
-This is the first and I hope the last time that I have to kill children!
-White star, have you ever killed before?
-Part of our jobs is to get our hands stained with the blood of many innocent who turn to the side of evil! I killed before!
-But never children, right? Melissa asked white star. She was curious about white star past experience with killing.
-I never killed children! And I hope I don’t have to do it again!
-There has been a silence ever since the battle first started! Where are the teachers?
After Michelle question, Melissa ran to the principal office to check on the teachers. When she arrived there, she saw the bones of the teachers and the principal.
-OH MY GOD!! WHO DID THIS??!! MICHELLE, DANIEL, WHITE STAR! COME HERE!!
-We heard your screaming! What’s going on? White star asked her.
-Look at this!!
-I think the bomb must have gotten to them as well! Michelle exclaimed.
-I don’t think it was the bomb, I think it was my nuclear powers.
-It can’t be! The last time we fought here it didn’t do it!
-Melissa, the last time there weren’t any toxic materials from the bombs... The remaining toxics and the wind must have mixed with the radiation emitted by my powers...
-There would be no point looking at the second floor! Your other friends and teachers must be in the same state.
-Luckily with our minds closed, this sight won’t traumatize us!
-Michelle got a point there! Team, let’s go!
Melissa decided to leave the school; there was nothing they could do. They now have to find the Emperor and avenge the death of their friends. They also need to rescue Diana.

Your ripping off a book called Pendragon, they use the word The Acolytes For their ppl...

Is this sarcasm because we dissagree on the Harry potter issue? dude.. The gaktianamus acolytes characthers I created them in 1998 when I saw Sailor Moon and Reboot. Saga of heroes is Power rangers/Reboot/Sailor Moon inspired.

The Acolytes are part of the religion. I never ever heard of that book.. The Gaktianamus acolytes were created around 1998, before I ever entered the internet.

D-12, if you're goin to reply. Be more objective, and mention the quality.

I did, i said the book. PENDRAGON, the travelers helpers have that name. Well you were talking about rip off's so i was just pointed that oout. But if you want me to talk about ur story you curse to much for no reason, especially if this is a power ranger story because their is no cursing in it...so you should try to refrain from using it, some places you use it for no reason.

Objectivly its like a bad anime script, with cursing thrown in for the sake of cursing, its like a bad dub. your plot is weak, you have to much dialogue. And you dont spend enough time developing ANYTHING

^I think you just got murced....

Like if You could do any better NGC.

Besides You gotta wait, the story is not even at his half.

Bad anime plot? Wow now we got the Master of Writing.


Anyways, it;s you against the %98.99 of the Internet that has found the Story good.

Strike 7: Sheniah returns! The power of woman cat’s Dark Spell.



The Acolytes started their journey to locate the emperor. The Acolytes used the Nimbo express train to patrol the skies, while White star used his star speed to check from the ground.
-So far we haven’t found any mysterious ships! Do you think they might have left the country already?
-Don’t even think that, Melissa! I won’t lose the girl I love so easily!
White star came back to the train to report.
-I haven’t found anything yet! I don’t think they are still here!
-How did you get inside the train? Daniel asked.
-I just used simple teleportation! Very easily!
-Any luck finding the emperor? Melissa asked.
-He’s not in metropolis! I can assure you that!
-We should look outside of Metropolis! Maybe we can find them somewhere where they won’t suspect that we know.
-That’s the brightest idea I heard from you today, Daniel!
-Ha! Very funny, Mr. Driver! Daniel said to the driver.
-No need for the sarcasm!
-You started with your little comment, Mr. Driver.
-If you two are done arguing we could start looking!
-White star, where could we go?
-Mr. Driver, do you know how to get to calle Del poder Bayamon?
-Yes, I do, White Star! Why?
-Let’s go there! They may try to attack Calle Del Poder!
-Why calle Del Poder? There’s nothing really worth stealing there!
-Neither in Metropolis, Michelle! I don’t think they want Puertorico because of their treasures!
-They may want the Gaktianamus mystical powers!
-Mr. Driver, there’s a flaw with your theory. When we battled them, they said that they have never heard of us before. So why would they want us?
-You are right about that, Melissa! But they might know about past mystical wars and they might have come to take away what remains of those powers. The Gaktianamus acolytes have fought here in puertorico for years, and if they find any of the underground power sources or traces of the mystical energies they might become even more indestructible!
-Mr. Driver is right! Those mystical traces never disappeared and although they are invisible they are still on the environment. My question is: Where in calle Del poder they could strike first?
White star was still thinking about where the enemies could strike, that’s when a mysterious stranger arrived at the train.
-All these years and you’re still ignorant about the biggest mystical traces source in all calle Del poder?
All the acolytes and the train driver were shocked. The driver stopped the train.
-Who the hell are you? No one who isn’t Nimbo connected cannot enter this train! You must die for intruding.
Mr. Driver pulled out his gun and pointed it to the Mysterious Stranger.
-Mr. Driver, you can put down your gun!
-White star, are you going to take his side? Should I kill you as well?
-We all are on the same side! His name is Sheniah!
-I remember that my mother told me that there was once a warrior named Sheniah and he was really powerful and arrogant! Melissa said.
-It’s been centuries since the last time we saw each other! I think the last time we saw each other was right before The Gaktianamus acolytes left on the Saga of Heroes Chaotic Millennia I
These Gaktianamus look younger, what was Sika thinking?!
-We may be young, but we’re really strong!
-I would like to see you proving that, Gak Acolyte!
-Sheniah, where do you think our enemies will strike next?
-White Star, do you remember what happened at the “Saga of Heroes: The college years”?
-Yes, the Planetchosers invaded the American university Bayamon campus! They killed the librarian and some other students! Julian Gak and Angel Namus fused into the Moonlight Soldier and almost killed Reynold with a chainsaw! White star replied to Sheniah’s question.
-The dilemma is: He didn’t! The Moonlight Soldier sentenced Reynold to a lifetime imprisonment in hell by using the eternal penitence! Which it makes that university one of the biggest mystical traces source in this country! Sheniah exclaimed.
-Mr. Driver! Take us to the American university in Calle Del poder Bayamon!
Melissa told to the driver to take them at the American university in calle Del poder Bayamon. In less than five minutes they arrived and the emperor was already attacking the university.
-Let’s go and kick some ass!! Melissa exclaimed.
-Should I go with you acolytes? Mr. Driver asked.
-Leave this to us! Take the train back to Nimbo for a recharge, we might need it later!
-You’re right, nuclear acolyte!
All acolytes arrived at the main building of the American university where they were greeted by woman cat.
-Hello and welcome! This university will soon be our great power source that would help us rule this world!
-We won’t let you rule this world! We will kill you first!
-Gak Acolyte, we didn’t know about your existence, but we did know about all kinds of mystical traces that are still on the air! Traces that can be used for power!
-Sheniah! White star! Go ahead and face the emperor! He must be on that big building that we saw when we were on the train!
-Gak Acolyte, I wish you good luck!
-Thanks, White star!
White star and sheniah ran towards inside the university to find the emperor, while the acolytes fought with woman cat.
It’s time to die! Melissa said to woman cat.
I won’t be the one to fight you! But I have a surprise for all of you! Dark Spell!!
From her finger, she shot a black energy blast that darkened the skies.
-Covering with Darkness in the whole sky? That trick is overused!
-This one is different, nuclear Acolyte! Bye bye!
Woman cat disappeared, in the same way that Neowolf did when he used his smoke bombs. Without attacking anyone, But maybe this time the acolytes will be prepared for what’s coming, unlike in their last confrontation with Neowolf.
Where did she go? Michelle asked.
Sheniah and white star came back.
-Did you kill the emperor? Daniel asked to sheniah and white star.
-We must kill the Gaktianamus acolytes! Crushing light!
Sheniah shot his crushing light attack at the Gaktianamus acolytes.
-That was critical! I never thought this guy could be so strong!
-Daniel, Sheniah is strong as hell! We better understand that!
-I understand it, Michelle!
The Acolytes were hit so critically that they couldn’t stand up.
-It’s time for the storm of chaos!
-What is that? Melissa asked to white star.
-We combine our powers and shoot it right at you in a powerful storm of Chaos!
-That’s a rip-off of our attack!
-Shut up! I don’t need to hear your opinion, nuclear acolyte.
-Even under a spell you don’t change, Sheniah!
-Crushing light!
-Star shots!
Both attacks formed the Storm of Light. But when the attack was about to hit the acolytes, the attacks got intercepted by an angel.
-White star! Huya guy ya nbaimaitonome!
-I knew an angel of justice had to appear sooner or later to punish me!
-White star, what the #### is this?
-That angel name is Milagros and she was sent by the guardians of my religion to punish me for joining the dark side.
-I’ll take care of her!
-Yui ghu!
-What did she said to me?
-She said that you don’t have the guts to shoot her! She dares you to kill her!
-Melissa, what the hell is this?
-Michelle, I have no idea what the hell is happening here! They are talking in some kind of strange language!
-I’ll kill you! Crushing light!!
Sheniah shot a full blast of his crushing light attack, Angel Milagros received a full direct shot, but the attack didn’t do a single scratch to her. She was pissed.
-GHUI! DEATH SENTCARU!
White Star and Sheniah were tied to a guillotine. They were placed on a bench, face down, and their necks positioned between the uprights. For the first time ever Sheniah was scared about something. He was begging not be killed, he was shouting the words:
-I HAVE NOTHING TO DO WITH YOUR RELIGION! LET ME GO!! LET ME GO!
-Now, Sheniah is the one doing all the whining. Melissa said.
-Angel Milagros! Kill them off! You can do it. Daniel said.
FINARU, DEATH!
The guillotine cut their heads off. It took less than half a second from blade drop to Sheniah’s and White Star’s head rolling into the waiting basket.
-Sentencau, Done….
The Angel disappeared.
-Our strength is back! That angel must have done something. Daniel said to the acolytes.
-We need to get going! We must find Neowolf and woman cat! Michelle said.
-It’s time to put a stop to the emperor! If we don’t stop him and his allies they will keep manipulating people into their side and we’ll have to keep killing. Melissa said.
The Acolytes went to search for the acolytes. They had no idea what was going to happen once they confronted Neowolf and woman cat but they were determined to put an end to all of this manipulating and killing.

Strike 8: The Gaktianamus acolytes vs. Neowolf and woman cat! The beginning of the final battles…

The Gaktianamus acolytes were on their way to confront the emperor, but when they were stopped on their road by Neowolf and Woman Cat.
-Get out of the way!
-Nuclear acolyte, you aren’t going anywhere! Unless you get to kill us, you won’t be going anywhere!
-Neowolf! I will blast you to pieces! Nuclear atoms!
-Mirror tail!!
Woman cat used her mirror tail, to deflect Daniel attack back to them.
-You still can’t defeat us! Dark howl!!
Neowolf used his dark howl to paralyze the acolytes.
-We can’t move!! Michelle exclaimed.
-You can’t paralyze me!! Nuclear double punch!
He punched Neowolf and woman cat in the face. Daniel’s punches broke the nose of both Neowolf and woman cat.
-You’ll pay for that!
Neowolf and woman cat attacked the acolytes using their tails.
-They sure have strong tails! And we can’t move! Daniel, you are our only hope!
-Nuclear energy!!
-Foolish boy! Mirror tail!!
-Ahh!!
-Strong bite of wolf!!
The Acolytes were bitten by Neowolf, They were bleeding badly. But not even blood could stop the Gaktianamus acolytes from accomplishing their mission.
-He bit our arms!! Melissa exclaimed.
-There’s still a way to finish this! Nuclear wave!
-Are you attacking your own teammates?
-Woman cat, my nuclear wave power heals my teammates, but cuts half of their attack power.
-That’s a small risk, we can take! Light beam!!
Neowolf and woman cat received a full direct hit of the light beam attack. But they weren’t affected by it.
-What the ####? Why the hell aren’t you dead? Melissa asked Neowolf and woman cat.
-My dark spell clouds the skies! And non-natural darkness cuts your power in half; the nuclear wave’s technique cuts another half and all the blats you have received from us.
-Woman cat has a point there! Prepare for death! Black fire!!
-Cats lovely slash attack!!
The acolytes kept receiving directly each and every blow. The acolytes fought back in many different ways, but they kept failing. Neowolf and woman cat were on the winning streak!! They stopped attacking the acolytes.
-We had enough fun with the acolytes! Woman cat, what do you say if we finish them off, by eating their hearts and intestines!
-“That sounds like a nice idea! Let’s rip them open and eat all their organs!!”
Daniel tried to stand up, but he couldn’t. He tried to attacked Neowolf and woman cat by using his nuclear evolution attack, but he was too weak to do it.
- “Crap! It can’t end like this! Eaten by two maniacs!!”
The Angel of justice appeared and trapped Neowolf and woman cat in a firewall.
-“That angel trapped us in a firewall!!”
“Ha! You won’t be able to get away from that wall not even if you both raise your power level beyond mine!”
Melissa asked to the angel of justice, how she was able to speak English. Angel of justice explained that she spoke English when she wasn’t battling.
-“Did you come to help us out?”
-“Melissa, as much as I would like to help you all fight, I can’t!” So, I’ll give you weapons created with some of the blood and bones of your fallen classmates.”
The Angel gave to Melissa an axe, To Daniel and Hunter’s knife and she gave to Michelle some daggers.
-“Use them well! They’re made from steel and the blood and bones from your fallen classmates.”
The Angel of justice disappeared and the firewall went down.
- “Strong bite of wolf!!”
-“It’s time to test my axe!”
She sliced Neowolf head’s off with her ax! He was screaming in a horrible and agonizing pain. Then she started to slice the rest of his body, until her axe was all covered with the blood and bones of Neowolf.
-“Neowolf!” You can’t be gone!! I can’t believe you acolytes killed him!! Cats slash attack!!”
Daniel stabbed woman cat chest with his knife, and Michelle used her daggers to pull woman cat’s heart.
-“That’s all for Neowolf and woman cat! We won!!”
-“Daniel, don’t forget that we need to find the emperor! Let’s find him, kill him, and rescue Diana”!
The Acolytes ran towards the area of the university where the emperor’s ship was stationed. They arrived there and the emperor told them to expect the final battle in the Lorencita Ramirez de Arellano elementary school. The emperor quickly got on his ship and ran off at a high speed.
-“We need to catch up to them! I must rescue the girl I love from the hands of that raper!!”
-Daniel, he’s a Pirate emperor not a rapist! No need for drama.
-Shut up, Michelle! I didn’t ask for your opinion!
-Shut up! The both of you! We need to return to metropolis and fight the emperor for the final time!
- Mr. Driver!! Come and get us out of here!
Michelle called Mr. Driver to take them back to metropolis, Toabaja for the final battle. Will they win or lose?

Would that 98.99 % of the internet be us and like two of your other friends...? just wondering :)

Also is this a fan-fic? i can't possiblely take this as a book, so it's a fan-fic right?

It dont take a master writer to add details or develop a story, nice comebacks by the way I am sure you will get that #### published tommorow, my good man, I am no master author but I assure you I could do better then that in my sleep.

As for 98. whatever % of the inmternet that loves it, 2 people here have already said it was poorly written. All I can say man is this it is badly written it is like a movie script but it is so predictable the lines are so flat the characters are poorly done, and if you think I cant write I posted a story for you to read in this folder take a look if you want, and then come back and talk to me, maybe I can give you some pointers...asshat

Well i am here to rate thwat you have so far. I'm guessing you want this as a movie script since there is almost no discription of where they are or what their doing. So movie wise here it goes. Even though movie scripts have alot less descriping u have almost none my friend. This is a major downfall. 2nd thing is obisouvly your cursing but i can understand since you were learning english better. I have to say this and you might get mad but your dialog sucks major ass. Yes i know you might be angry but here are examples of horrible dialog. EX:

-I haven’t found anything yet! I don’t think they are still here!
*Yeah bad*

-We had enough fun with the acolytes! Woman cat, what do you say if we finish them off, by eating their hearts and intestines!
*Ok wtf, that's messed*

*WORSE LINE EVER*
-“Daniel, don’t forget that we need to find the emperor! Let’s find him, kill him, and rescue Diana”!
*are we 5 here?*

Now see these are things u got to work on.
Good things - It's somewhat original. Although i have no freaken clue where this is taking place cause of these names but i find it somwhat original. It reminds me alot of powerrangers/DBZ style. The names are nice and simple except for a few. So try and use those tips and i'm sure ur fan-fic will turn out ok.

3.5/10

Pros -
Original story
New places

Cons -
Bad dialog
no dicription
words used for no good reason.

Final coment - Good try for i am hoping to be ur first fan-fic. Keep it up and hope it turns out for the better.

*Sorry about crappy spelling, i can't type on this old ass shitty keybored*

Strike 9: The final battle! The Gaktianamus Acolytes vs. the emperor

The Gaktianamus acolytes arrived at the lorencita Ramirez de Arellano elemental school.
-Stop the train! We will go alone!
-You can’t be serious! Melissa, you’ll need all the help you can get!
-M.R driver, no offense, but... Michelle and Daniel are all the help I need! If we need help we will call you.
-As you wish! Good luck! God bless you all!
-Thanks, Mr. Driver!
Melissa said her goodbyes to the driver, and they landed in front of the school. They ran inside the school, the emperor ship was already flying over the school.
Let’s try and blow up the ship from here!
-Melissa, we can’t do that!
-Why not? You’re always the one that wants to nuke everything you fine around!
-Because the girl I love with all of my heart and soul is inside that ship! Plus we don’t have enough firepower to crush that ship.
-I’m sorry! But... I’m going to have to agree with Daniel on this one, Melissa! Diana is part of the reason why we are here.
-Fine! Let’s fly over there and kill the emperor! And if Diana starts with her #####ing I will kill her as well!
-You can’t do that! Unless she turns against us we can’t kill her! Daniel replied.
-You win! Let’s go!
The acolytes flied towards the emperor ship, they entered and immediately they were welcome by the soldiers of the emperor.
-You three are in a place where you don’t belong! Turn back or die! I’m the leader of the emperor security staff and we challenge you all to a final head on battle!
-We accept your challenge!
-Melissa, we never agreed to that challenge! These guys have big weapons!
-But I agree with Melissa! I want to fight them! After we kill them we can rescue Diana from the hands of the emperor.
-Enough talk!! Men, Open fire!! Kill those acolytes!!
The Acolytes evaded the shots. They kept evading and evading, until Melissa got a clear shot at the Leader, she used her light beam blast. At the same time she was shot in the arm.
My arm!! I got hit while killing the leader!
The remaining guards kept shooting. And the acolytes kept evading until they all finally got a clear shot at them and used the storm of friendship. After they killed the guards they continued looking for the emperor until they found his throne control room. The emperor got up from his throne, drew his sword, walked two steps forward and said:
Welcome Gaktianamus acolytes! You are worthy rivals! You killed all the opponents I have sent to you. Plus you killed Neowolf and woman cat!
(Daniel said that they couldn’t take all the credit, that part of the triumph was part of the Angel of justice from the Star religion that saved them.)
You still are worthy opponents! You have great powers for such a young age!
Enough talk! It’s time to release the girl I love! Do it or die!
The emperor chuckled; he looked at Daniel straight in the eyes and asked him:
Tell me, acolyte! Are you sure that is love the thing that you feel for that girl?
I’m sure! I never have been so sure of anything in my entire ####ing life! That’s why I’m here!
The emperor started to applaud.
Great inspirational speech, acolyte! But if you want her back, you will have to kill me first!
Piece of cake! Nuclear atoms!
Sword and shield block!!
The emperor also used a shield to protect himself from Daniel’s attack. He deflected Daniel attack back at the acolytes.
Why do they always have to deflect attacks? Michelle asked.
I’ll cut him to pieces!! Supersonic slice!!
The supersonic slice is a high speed attack. Using her axe she can slice an enemy to pieces or leave only their bones. But the emperor was able to see and protect himself from the attack.
How were you able to see such a high speed attack? I used the speed of light along with my acolyte speed to give you a fatal cut! Is impossible to evade it!
Your weapons are too predictable! Since the blood and bones of your friends were used to create them I’m able to sense the lost souls and their human aura!
That gives you an hundred percent accuracy at blocking it! Our weapons are useless!!
Did you discover all that by yourself? Water acolyte!
Melissa told to Daniel and Michelle to leave her alone fighting the emperor, and that they should go and find Diana. Daniel didn’t wanted because he wanted to have the joy and thrill of killing the emperor all by himself.
I’ll fight him! You both go and find Diana! Daniel, you’re the second strongest in the team! We need you alive!
You’re the leader! Come on Daniel!
Michelle grabbed Daniel by his arm and took him with her to find Diana. Melissa prepared herself to resume the battle.
-“Emperor, now that the both of us are alone we can fight better!
-“You do realize that without your little partners you can’t perform any of your finishing moves?!
-“I already realized that! Come and get me!! Come and get me if you dare!!
The emperor accepted her dare and used his boomerang sword attack.
-“Boomerang sword!!”
-“Light beam!”
With the light beam she destroyed the sword. She jumped and she threw her axe to the emperor. He blocked it with his shield, and she immediately used her double kick attack! With one kick she destroyed his shield, and with her second kick she kicked him in the mouth.
-“Did I break your jaw? Or did I break your jaw and everything inside your mouth as well?
The emperor was spitting blood; He had his whole mouth and emperor gown full of blood.
-“This is not over yet, Gaktianamus acolyte!! Ancient cross!!
Melissa was crucified. The emperor still had some tricks left.
-“Do you really think that by tying me up to a cross you will win? You’re seriously wrong!
-“No, You’re wrong! The ancient cross disables all of your Gak acolyte powers! Including your inner Gak powers that you inherited from your family!
-“My friends are still able to fight! You haven’t won yet!
-“But I will win! I introduce my second act: The electric torture!
-“What is the electric torture? Sounds pansey!
-You won’t see the pansey on it once I start the torture! Cross, electrify and torture!!
Melissa was being electrocuted in the cross, she was screaming in an agonizing pain! As the power of the torture kept increasing the more her screams increased and her pain. Meanwhile Daniel and Michelle found the room where Diana was being kept against her will. The room was protected by a steel door made of Gaktinonzoid. The door was password protected as well.
-I wonder how the emperor was able to get his hands on the Gaktinonzoid metal.
-He probably found a way to stole it.
-Michelle, I don’t think he would have been able to get through Nimbo. Maybe he found some Gaktinonzoid metal scraps somewhere on earth. Anyways... We need this door password!
-I’ll hack the password! I’ll use a password breaker code I learned from Ramon before all of this happened.
-“Do you really think that you will be able to hack through the emperor computer?”
-“Of course I can do it!”
-This is great! Michelle the Hacker! (Daniel said in a sarcasm way to Michelle...)
-Password: Break Zero Numeric password: 5262
Password Validated! Access Granted.
The password was correct and the doors opened, they entered and they saw Diana. She was chained to the wall.
-Diana! Wake up!
Daniel was trying to wake up Diana, they weren’t sure if she was unconcious or asleep.
-Daniel, I think she’s unconcious! We should just break the chains and get her out of here!
Diana regained consciousness. She started to rant something, she went into a trance, her eyes became yellow and the Solar Acolyte symbol appeared or her forehead and chest.
-What the ####??!! Daniel, what is happening to her?
-I have no idea! Diana, Snap out of it!
Diana broke out of her chains, and started to levitate. She was glowing yellow. Suddenly Michelle started to feel ill.
-I feel like I’m evaporating! It feels like a full solar power!
-Michelle! Get out of here! I’ll handle Diana!
-You can’t handle her alone! Together we will snap Diana out of her trance and return her to safety!
-If you stay here any longer her powers will kill you! Just get out and close the door!
-All right I’ll exit the room! Please be careful!
Michelle ran outside of the room and closed the door.
-Diana, what’s happening to you? What are you doing?
She raised her middle finger and pointed it to the roof. In the roof a small energy ball was created, after one minute from appearing, the energy ball exploded and it created four swords.
-Gak acolytes are the only ones that can create stuff! How can a solar acolyte create weapons?
Diana broke out of the remaining chains.
-She destroyed the chains!
Diana stooped glowing and ranting. She was morphed into a Gaktianamus acolyte and was ready to help fight the emperor. Daniel was still shocked about everything.
-Daniel, Snap out of it! We have to help Melissa fight the emperor!
Diana summoned her solar cannon and blew up the door. She started to run and Daniel was running right behind her. Michelle was wondering what was happening and how she was able to destroy a door made of Gaktinonzoid. She was clueless about the whole situation.
-Wait for me! What the hell just happened?!
-Grab this sword and come with us!
Diana threw a sword to Michelle; Michelle caught it and started to run along with them.
-Lucky for me that I was in the little girls’ baseball team when I was younger!
-This is not the time for baseball jokes! I created those swords so we could fight the emperor a whole lot better.
Meanwhile in the control room, the emperor was still torturing Melissa.
-Now you’re feeling the pain of each one of my soldiers that you and your friends have killed!
- as I said before: “This sounds pansey”!
-Then why are you screaming? I will finish you off now!
-Yeah, what are you waiting for? Finish me if you’re going to do it!
Melissa was smiling, even if she was being electrocuted by the cross. The emperor drew a whip from his under his cape. His whip was made of steel and had spikes made of steel around it.
-It’s for you to Die!! Whip of the royalty! Whip and kill!!
Daniel used his sword to cut in half the emperor whip. That’s when Michelle and Diana quickly attacked the emperor in the back.
-Ah!!! Those swords are strong! They destroyed my whip.
-I think my brain got fried in this electrocution! Because I see Diana as the solar acolyte. And there’s no way that little ##### would ever become a Gaktianamus acolyte.
-I’ll get you out of this cross! Swift cut!
Michelle used her swift cut, a high speed slash that can destroy even the strongest metals. Because of the speed that it requires only a person with a wild and strong heart can use it. (Water is wild and strong so Michelle is the perfect person for the technique.)
-Are you okay? Michelle asked Melissa.
-I’m okay. But my brain must be a little fried because I see Diana as the solar acolyte.
-News flash! She is the Solar Acolyte! She somehow was able to become an Acolyte!
Melissa couldn’t believe Michelle’s words; she refused to believe that Diana could be chosen to become a Gaktianamus acolyte.
-With that cut in your back it’s a miracle that you can still move! It’s time to end this!
The emperor stood up.
-Do you really think that I need movements to defeat all four of you?
-Enough #### out of your mouth! Solar blast!
-Shield of darkness!
The emperor shielded himself against Diana’s Solar Blast attack. That’s when Daniel decided to use his nuclear punch, Melissa used her light beam, and Michelle used her bubbles attack. But the emperor blocked each one of their attacks. He chuckled and looked directly into the Acolytes eyes and said:
-“You’re more foolish than I thought you were!”
Diana asked him that if he was so smart, then why he was the one with all the wounds and about to lose. The emperor looked straight to Diana’s eyes only with a look of confidence and dared Diana to attack him. Diana’s personality changes once she morphs into an acolyte. she’s now Impulsive and aggressive instead of sweet and horny. Diana quickly drew her sword and tried to stab the emperor in the chest. But the emperor had more tricks that she thought.
-Activate destiny card! Flights disabled!
The emperor knew that once that he dared her to attack him she would do it so he hid the destiny card: “Flights disabled” which disables their flying power. The destiny cards are different sets of cards decks that have different spells to disable the enemy Melissa was mad at Diana and was telling to Michelle and Daniel that she knew that Diana wasn’t Worthy of an acolyte’s powers. Diana wanted to prove her wrong, so she tried once again.
-Activate destiny card! Sand clock!
And once again Diana fell for the trap. She activated another destiny card and this one would cost them the battle. They were trapped in the sand clock and their powers can’t penetrate the strong glass that the sand clock is made of. They knew it was their end and Melissa already was blaming Diana for what happened.
-I never knew it would happen! I just wanted to kill him! Diana said while she cleaned her tears of sadness. Her pride and her spirit were broken! And Melissa wasn’t making it any better. The emperor never lost full control of the battle and when he realized that it made him even happier.
-Cry all you want! None of you will escape from this Trap! At the beginning I just wanted this world treasures, but when you three interfered and I saw the way you defeated Neowolf and woman cat….
-And that’s when you decided to come after us? Michelle asked interrupting the emperor.
-Yes! Your powers are amazing! Once you die, I will pull out your bodies from those clocks and steal your powers! Diana was the perfect bait to bring you here! You can thank her later on in hell!
So far it seems like the emperor won the battle; But Diana kneeled and started to pray. Is she praying for a good life in heaven or for a way out of the trap? Will her prayers be answered?

Strike 10: All powers elevated to the highest level! The battle of the fusions...


The emperor has won the battle. The acolytes are trapped inside the clocks and the sand is halfway to the top. The Acolytes were using their swords to try and break the glass, but there was no way out of there. That’s when the emperor decided to take their swords away by using his Dark Snatch attack.

- Don’t be a thief! Those swords belong to us! Michelle shouted.
-You three look like you’re the only ones that care about it because your little friend has spent the last three minutes praying.
-#####, this is not the time for praying!
-I finished my praying to god. Now I will pray again to another source. Diana replied to Melissa’s comment.
-You’re useless as an acolyte! I knew it all along!
-Melissa, I won’t be useless when I finish my second prayer.
-I’m going to make things more interesting for you, children. Activate ship self-destruction sequence!
-Why are you activating the self-destruction sequence? Daniel asked.
-Just in case after the sand covers you all and I steal your powers and one of you children decides to pull off something, I will active the self-destruct system of the ship.
The Emperor activated the self-destruction system, they had ten minutes to get out of the ship and defeat the emperor and any remaining force of him. Diana stopped praying silently and started to pray out loud.
-I call upon all the greatest powers of the universe! Chaos, Destruction, Life, Heaven, Hell, Light, Forest and death! All Powers elevated to the highest level! Bring forth the power of the Universe, save your chosen guardians from the claws of death! Power of the Universe!
The Emperor thought Diana was going crazy because she was about to die, but suddenly the orbs started to glow and the sand clocks were broken freeing the acolytes and giving them a chance to attack.
-How were you able to escape? You only are four weak ten year old children!
Diana explained to the emperor that she used the power of the universe to free them all, that it wasn’t their own acolyte powers who allowed them to make a quick escape. The emperor was mad and he used his electro shock attack on the acolytes, he was trying to shock them to death, but Diana used her solar glow to temporarily blind the emperor.
-Good Job!
-Thanks Daniel!
-We have to finish him! Let’s use the power of friendship!
Diana, Michelle and Daniel didn’t understand what she meant by that, they thought Melissa was speaking metaphorically so they asked her how they were going to use their friendship against the emperor. Melissa explained that the power of friendship is her finishing move, all the combined powers of the Acolyte team to form a big energy blast that can kill the emperor with one quick shot. They understood it quickly and they started to get ready for the attack. They all raised their hands and were pointing at Melissa. That was the Position to create the Power of friendship; they learned it automatically after the explanation given by Melissa.
-“Nuclear Acolyte Power!”
-“Solar Acolyte Power!”
- “Water Acolyte power!”
After she received all powers from the acolytes, her eyes started to glow and her whole body as well. She was ready to launch the attack:
-Gak power of friendship! Blast away!
The Gak power of friendship was launched successfully; the emperor received a full direct blast from it. He recovered his sight; he looked at the acolytes and fell to the floor. The Game was over. Diana refused to believe it so she drew her Solar Cannon blew up a wall of the ship to get more solar power and use it to power up her solar cannon. The Acolytes were surprised by Diana’s bad Move, Melissa said to her:
-You fool! Now we’re going down even faster!
Then Daniel started to defend Diana by telling to Michelle and Melissa:
-I admit the move was a little bad! But she did in our best interests!
Michelle replied to Daniel’s comment saying:
-She tried to help us, but now she’s going to have us killed! We can’t fly, the ship will blow up in seven minutes, and now we’re going to die even faster without time to think of a plan!
-I have a plan! And this one will help us all!
-What do you have in mind? ---- Daniel asked Diana.
Diana summoned all of the orbs and threw them off the ship. Melissa immediately asked her:
-What the hell are you doing?? And now do you want to leave us without a power source?
-Trust in me. Great powers of the Universe! We your Chosen ones are in great danger of meeting up with death! We are in need of your great powers, Oh Legendary God birds we call upon you: Etrios and Etrias!
The skies turned dark and the orbs went crazy. They were spinning around in the sky at the speed of a meteor. Then like meteors they fell to the ground and the skies cleared up.
-What the #### just happened? ---Melissa asked.
Diana then charged her solar cannon with the solar energy and started to shoot all the control area, including the self destruction control panel who was indicating that only three minutes remained till self-destruction. She left everything in flames and the emperor lying on the floor, she told the acolytes to jump off and that she will follow after them. For some strange reason Melissa decided to follow Diana’s orders and she and the others jumped off from the ship. Diana kept blasting the ship and later on she jumped off with the acolytes.
-Diana wants to attack us from behind! That’s why she stayed on the ship!
Diana appeared right by Melissa’s side and told her:
-That wasn’t my part of plans! Come forth: Etrios and Etrias!
The two legendary god birds came to their rescue. Etrios was a blue bird with red stripes on his long wings, Etrias was a Red bird with blue stripes on her long and beautiful wings, they both had short peaks, and they both glowed like gold. The acolytes landed on the birds backs.
-How soft they are! So cute! ---Michelle exclaimed.
-But how are you able to summon such rare birds out of the orbs?
Diana explained to Daniel that the two birds were the guardians of the powers of the universe and that they were trapped inside the orbs to protect them from any evil force that might get to them. The emperor ship was going down at a high rate speed and it was in fire. The self destruction sequenced ended and the ship exploded again but it was an even bigger explosion. The ship crashed into the school courtyard.

-We’re at a very high altitude! The emperor likes his altitudes. Daniel said.
The acolytes turned back to see the ruins of the explosion, they didn’t landed but this time they were at a low altitude. That’s when from the ruins a car speeded off, it was the emperor along with a demon kid. He was still alive. Melissa and Diana were shocked and nervous because they thought he was dead, the emperor activated two laser guns that were located on the front of his car and started to shoot the birds. Etrias used her fire blast and Etrios used his ice of wind attack, the emperor evaded them both with perfect accuracy, then the demon kid that was on the passenger seat got up and shot his red spikes attack, hitting directly the birds and making them fall along with the acolytes. The birds were whimpering with pain and fear, then the orbs came back, and Diana decided to return the birds to where they were.
-Etrias and Etrios, Return to the world that you were once trapped!
Their power divided and they returned to the inside of the orbs. The emperor’s car was heading on at a high speed and the acolytes were wounded and they could hardly stand up, that’s when MR Driver came to the rescue, he used the train mega lasers to destroy the tires of the emperor car, the acolytes were able to stand up and run. They entered the train.
-Are you four ok? Why is this girl an acolyte?
Melissa told Mr. Driver that they were clueless on how she got the acolytes powers but that even she hates admitting it, she saved their lives. Meanwhile outside the train, the emperor and his demon kid fused and became a giant. The train alarm activated, Mr. Driver immediately checked the control panel alert system to check what the problem was since he wasn’t watching because he was taking care of the acolytes. When he saw the emperor as giant destroying the school, he immediately ran back to where the acolytes were (The back area of the train.) he told to the acolytes that Michelle needed to fuse with him so the train robot battle mode could be activated and that’s the only way to stop the emperor once and for all. Michelle agreed with fusing with him and they started the ceremony. They first stand up straight and looked each other straight to the face and started to chant the fusion spell.

-Powers of fusion activate! Water Acolyte!
-Powers of fusion activate! Celestial driver!
And a flash of light erupted and they fused. Michelle completely changed, she was all grown up, with her hair long that reached to her butt, very beautiful formed face and lips, her blue eyes(Blue eyes created by the acolyte morph, originally she has brown eyes.) were glowing like diamonds. She was taller, stronger and more determined.
-Switching to battle robot mode! Acolyte change!
The train turned into a battle robot, creating 4 additional seats for each acolyte to sit down. (Originally only the driver had a seat and everybody else had to go standing up.) this time they all piloted the Battle robot. They all at the same time said:
-Battle robot activated!
The emperor saw the battle robot and approached to it, he tackled it using the strength of all his body, the battle robot fell to the ground.
-Come on, team! Help me get this robot up!
The emperor started to kick the robot, and to stomp it. He had them cornered and nowhere to defend; they needed to do something fast before the emperor kills them. Diana was giving them the status of the robot, the robot was in critical and that they needed to stop the emperor before he destroyed them. Fused Michelle had a plan she channeled her powers and along with the other acolytes power source, that gave them enough strength to send the emperor flying.
-Look at him fly!
-Your plan was great! Fused Michelle, you look so hot!
- Daniel, is cheating in front of his girlfriend!
-Shut up, Melissa! Diana is my friend, a good one.
Diana was on her seat giggling and Michelle as well, less than a minute later the alarms activated! The emperor was back for more, and the acolytes decided to face him head to head.
-Let’s do it! Acolyte team, get ready to use Phoenix run and punch attack!
The emperor ran at a high speed towards them, he drew his sword and he was aiming at the battle robot head was. (The Acolytes were located on the head.) The Acolytes were aiming at the emperor’s stomach. And they stroked! The Acolytes evaded the sword attack by a centimeter and they immediately landed the punch on the emperor stomach. They kicked him on the face to push him back.
-We need to finish him! Now! Diana exclaimed. Her eyes were glowing, in her eyes you could see the passion and determination of chaos and death, and she wanted death upon the emperor. Even though only Michelle could see that since she was the one with the advance powers. Melissa had an idea; she asked Fused Michelle if she could turn their swords into one giant sword and use it to finish off the emperor. Michelle told the acolytes to give them their swords and that she could try it. She tried it and it worked! The robot now had a sword.
-Fused Michelle, finish him off! Now!
-Calm down, Diana! Wait till he gets near us!
-I won’t wait!
Diana grabbed fused Michelle controls and approached the emperor. She activated the big sword and killed the emperor. He returned to his normal size and the demon kid exploded. Then fused Michelle pushed Diana away and asked her:
-What the hell were you thinking? We could’ve been killed!
-But we dint get killed! It’s over! He died, his demon kid died, we save the world and now his body is back to normal. That’s what you wanted! Wasn’t it?
Fused Michelle slapped Diana on the face and told her that they had to be careful since the emperor was always full of tricks. They decided to get out of the ship and pick up the emperor’s body. When they were about to pick it up the emperor opened his eyes. The acolytes got scared a little bit, the emperor started to talk.

-Nice job! You finally put a stop to me! If it wasn’t for that meddling Solar Acolyte I would have won!
-You’re supposed to be dead! Why are you still alive?
-Water Acolyte, This is the little bit of energy I have left, but I did wanted to let you all know something, something that will make you doubt of your own teammates.
-Cut the crap and start talking! --- Daniel exclaimed.
-You know how each one of you comes from an Unlimited Gaktianamus Acolyte, right?
-Yes? What’s the point? –Melissa asked.
-Diana doesn’t come from an acolyte! Actually she comes from someone darker! She’s a direct decedent from…
Before the emperor had a chance to finish talking, Diana finished him by using her solar energy blast. Fused Michelle asked her why she didn’t’ let the emperor talk and Diana told her that the emperor was getting boring already with his fairytales. Diana disappeared, Michelle defused, the driver told the acolytes to report tomorrow morning at nimbo, The Acolytes deactivated their powers and each one went to their homes.

Pegasus....Oh man.

I'm not trying to come off as mean, for once, and I'm not here to insult your writing...talents.

But really man, take the advice given to you. Re-write ALL of this. Take out the corny parts, take out the awkward paragraphs, take out the sentances that have no buisness even being there.

I understand why most of it is like is, since you are still learning english but if you just re-read what you write, and try and look at it through our point of view, you will see what comes off as "corny" and how you can make it more mature. We aren't children here, and we don't want stories that read like they are written for children.

Like NGC said. The dialogue is a little flat and predictable and I have a few problems with the action scenes.

YOU DO HAVE SOME STRONG POINTS THOUGH.

You have the ability to write in bulk, which is good.


Don't take offense to this post. You posted these stories to get reviewd, and when NGC, D12, or myself actually takes the time to do it, you should appreciate it and take our advice.

Good work.

I did some re-writing to the story, Since this story was written in the Fall of 2003. I added a bit more description, removed some unncesary slang and cursing. These chracthers have traits if you look deep enough. From here till the end it begins a new arc, more darker. and BTW the story is about three 10-yrold children so some stuff may be corny.
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Strike 11: Shadows from the past…

It was Monday night already and after a long day, Daniel went to bed early. There was a Lunar Eclipse that night; Daniel started to dream about some new acolyte team in a university these girls were different from the usual Gaktianamus acolyte’s teams these ones looked like they were involved in some kind of video game many years into the future. Between his sleep, Daniel began to shout the words and names he heard on his dream.

“A new destiny? What is this? Saribeth, Karen, Ruthy, Anais and Joanny! Log on!
DESTINY’S DAWN!!”

Daniel woke up, sweating and breathless. His heart was beating fast and he was nervous. He immediately called his mom and dad.
-“Mom! Dad! Please come!!”
His parents came immediately to his room, to see what happened. He explained to them that he had a nightmare or a dream, that he saw what he might think a prediction of the future, his mom placed her hand on his forehead to check if he was sick, she told him that he was burning up, and that it all might be caused by the hard week he had. Daniel went back to sleep and his nightmares or dreams (whatever they can be called) returned. This time he was seeing the acolytes fighting in a different place and different techniques, meteors of light and a university. Daniel woke up again and wasn’t able to get back to sleep, he was afraid of having those nightmares again. Meanwhile on Lake Avenue, Diana was morphed and standing in a Radio antenna of the area. She wasn’t able to sleep well, so she decided to go out and a have a walk, that’s when a big gust of wind came and knocked her out of the antenna and into the ground. A shadowy figure appeared and transported her to another world, a world different from earth. Diana was all alone in that world and only the echo of her voice could be heard. The shadowy figured abandoned his shadowy form, and appear as a Tall man, with white hair, red eyes, and white skin. He was one of the most beautiful men that can be seen, but his red eyes looked like the devil’s eyes, full of evil and darkness. Diana approached the man and asked him:

-“Where have you taken me? What kind of place of this?”
-“This is my realm and here rules change a little bit from those in the real world.”
Diana was getting nervous; she wanted to cover her nervousness by asking firmly and directly to the mysterious man:
-“What do you mean by that? And who are you?”
The mysterious man chuckled, pulled out from his pockets a wine bottle and a wine glass and said to Diana:
-“In this world whoever loses a battle faces horrendous consequences! And my name is Reneus! Let’s toast for our nice meeting!”
Reneus drank a glass of wine, toasting in honor for their meeting. Diana got tired of Reneus arrogance and she tried to shoot him with her solar light, but he evaded it without even trying. That’s when things started to get a little cold! The world suddenly went into some kind of ice age. Powerful snow storms, temperatures over zero, Diana was trembling of cold, she hardly could move. That’s when Reneus showed her one his tricks.
-“Mammoth, Come forward!”
A mammoth came from the underground and stand right by Reneus side. He ordered the mammoth to attack Diana, to eat her alive if it came to that. The mammoth went full charge against Diana but she wasn’t going to give up, she used her solar aura to keep herself warm.
-“Mammoth, Stomp her!”
When the mammoth was about to stomp her, she used her solar blast to attack it. The Mammoth blew up in pieces. Reneus was shock by Diana’s counter attack; then he threw his wine bottle and glass away and decided to attack Diana with ice crystals. Diana became angry and summoned her solar cannon; she charged it with the strength of his solar energy and her own anger. She immediately pulled the trigger when the ice crystals were about to hit her. The emperor landed miles away, ending the ice age simulation.
-“That’s what happens when you mess with a Gaktianamus! Get me out of here before I find you and tear you limb to limb!”
Reneus reappeared and activated many different simulations at one, putting Diana through many different climates and environments. Diana was a little overwhelmed and disoriented by the change and decided to attack him directly with her solar light, but it was mysteriously deflected back at her with the double of attack power. Diana fell on her knees and was left badly wounded, confused, and defeated. After all that struggle it was finally over, Reneus won the battle. That’s when Diana fearing for her fate asked him:

-“What the hell are you? What do you want?” Diana asked Reneus, there was fear in her voice, her end was approaching and there was nothing she could do about it. The emperor started to walk towards where Diana was step by step, taking his time, enjoying his victory and the fact that he won against a Gaktianamus acolyte. He finally was right in front of her; she stood up slowly, and looked at Reneus face to face.

- “Who I’m am? My indentity doesn’t matter for now! What matters is that you lost! That means: you’re mine now.”
Diana asked to Reneus what he wanted with her, the emperor then told her:
- “You will become part of my army! You’re the one who will help me put an end to a long millenium of Gaktianamus Acolytes.”

That’s when the whole battlefield was covered in complete darkness and shadows. After that is unknown what Reneus did to her.
Meanwhile on nimbo: The guardians summoned Sika and Siran to the Celestial chamber (That’s the Guardians throne room.) They wanted to know about Diana’s strange way of becoming an acolyte and her compulsive behavior, Sika and Siran explained to the guardians that they didn’t chose her, she chose herself. The guardians were skeptical about it and they demanded some proof. (They don’t allow random choosing, since the Gaktianamus acolyte power is a very sacred thing for the Gaktianamus religion.) That’s when Siran decided to summon Daniel since he witnessed the event. Daniel was magically transported to the chamber.



-“What is this place? I’m supposed to be sleeping! Or maybe is a dream?”
The Solar Guardian told Daniel that this wasn’t a dream that he was on the celestial chamber of nimbo and that they needed to ask him a couple of questions. He immediately stood up, morphed, and said to the guardians that they could ask him anything that they needed to know. The Solar Guardian was the first to ask.
-“Is it true that Diana Senbendinks chose herself as the solar Gaktianamus acolyte?”
Daniel immediately replied.
-“Yes, it’s true! It was something extraordinary”

The Gak guardian asked to Daniel if he was in love with Diana. Daniel asked the guardian why he wanted to know. Siran said to Daniel to stop questioning the guardians and that he had to answer the question.
-“Yes, I love that girl more than heaven!”
All guardians were a little surprised by Daniel’s answer. That’s when Sika approached him and asked him:
-“How old is Diana? The Darkness within a person gets stronger by the age.”
-“Diana is thirteen years old, she failed the 6th grade twice.”

Siran and Sika asked the guardians what they thought about it. They said that Diana must be brought to their chambers immediately at 6:30A.M. It was a matter of life and death. Daniel was confused; he had no idea what they were talking about. Siran decided to be the one to break the news to Daniel.
-“Each one of you where chosen to become Gaktianamus acolytes because you’re family from the unlimited Gaktianamus acolytes, But Diana is not a descendant from any acolyte; she’s a descendant from...”

Daniel grabbed Siran by his clothing and asked him to tell him already from who Diana descends from.

“Diana is a descendant from Gaber’s Gak Caper arch-enemy: Pablo Senbendinks! The older she gets, the bigger the darkness within her grows! She needs to go under a blessing treatment or otherwise the darkness within self will eventually take her over completely causing a lot of damage! She’s loose cannon with all that darkness within herself and the solar acolyte power she possesses. If she were to become evil, she would be more powerful than you and the Gak acolyte powers combined.

-“Can’t you all cut off her power and she will no longer be what you call a “Loose cannon?”
The Water power guardian explained that they already tried that out and it didn’t work, for some reason they can’t cut off her power. The least they can do is remove the darkness within her. Then Siran said to Daniel:

-“You and your friends must bring Diana back here before it’s too late for her and all of us. That’s your new mission.”


Daniel then explained to Sika and the guardians that he and the others acolytes would take care of it in the morning, because he had to go back to his bed before his parents notice that he’s missing. Sika understanding that, Teleported Daniel back to his bedroom without any noises.
The Tuesday morning came and Daniel woke up at 7:30A.M. He immediately grabbed his cell phone, called both Melissa and Michelle, and He told them to meet him at the Cataño town plaza at 8:00A.M. Since they still have a half-hour to go, he will call Diana and ask her to meet up with them. Michelle and Melissa who were still half-asleep agreed with Daniel idea. They all hung up their phones and began preparing themselves for the reunion.

(Half an hour later…)

“This little reunion forced me to tell my mom that I was the water acolyte! She almost had a heart attack. My mom sometimes is a little overprotective.”

“You are a decedent from past Acolytes meaning that your family must’ve known that you would become an acolyte sooner or later.”




Michelle then explained that ever since her father death in a battle with some terrorists, her mother has been overprotecting with her. She always feared the day that she might become an acolyte, because her mother is afraid that she might get killed in battle just like it happened to his father three years ago. Then Melissa and Daniel said their condolences to Michelle, but Michelle told them not to worry about it, instead they had to worry about the issue that they were about to discuss that required them to get up so early. Melissa then corrected Michelle telling her that Daniel was the one with the issues to discuss since he was his idea to get them up so early and out of town. Then Daniel sat down on one of the small benches the main plaza had and began talking about the reasons they were reunited so early in the morning.

“I brought you all here because of a crisis situation that involves the fate of Diana, the Gaktianamus acolytes, and Nimbo. But before I begin with that crisis, I had to tell you that I had a weird dream last night.”

“You never explain your dreams... what’s so different about this one?” Michelle asked.

“I saw in my dream 5 girls! They were an all female team of Gaktianamus acolytes! They were in a university and they had powers different from ours. For some reason I knew their names their names were Saribeth, Karen, Ruthy, Anais and Joanny. I also heard the words: Log on and Destiny’s dawn.”


Melissa and Michelle thought that he was crazy, since there has never been known of a female all team of Gaktianamus acolytes and that it was impossible. Daniel then told them to believe him, that maybe they are the future Gaktianamus acolytes. The ones who will replace the current team once they retire.

“Technically we’re a female only team since you’re the only boy here.”

“But this team that I saw in my dream is an all female team! And they’re Powers are so different from ours. It looked like a video game!”

“Let’s forget about your fantasy of an all female acolyte team!” Melissa replied with sarcasm.”- “remember that in nimbo they are sexists and they won’t allow an all female team. Back on the original topic: what’s the crisis? And Where’s Diana?”

“Diana is part of the crisis... you see... last night while I was asleep I was teleported to Nimbo throne room to reunite with the guardians, Sika, and Siran. They asked me about the issue of Diana choosing herself. They also said that she’s a descendant from Pablo SenBendinks who was Gaber’s Gak caper arch-Enemy back in the 20th century. Because of that, Diana is a strong holder of dark powers which if she doesn’t get them remove it could turn her against us and we cannot allow that. I called Diana this morning to explain her, but according to her parents she’s been missing since last night.”

“Wait... So Diana might become sooner or later our enemy? Neither that or her disappearance doesn’t surprise me at all.”

For some reason Melissa wasn’t surprised by Diana’s disappearance, maybe because she doesn’t get along well with Diana. She doesn’t get along with her maybe because Diana is a little “Sluty”, “Grabbing stuff, she or anyone is not supposed to touch”. Although the boys do like it; but it looks bad. Diana is sweet but at the same has the personality of a 15 yr old #####. Or it maybe that Melissa has a hidden passion for Daniel and knowing that Daniel only lives for Diana makes her hate for Diana even bigger. . Melissa was still convinced that she disappeared on her own and that she’s only doing it In order to call their attention. But Michelle and Daniel thought different they were starting to worry about Diana, so they decided to teleport back to nimbo even if the reunion is two hours and thirty minutes later. They arrived at Nimbo main palace, only an angel was there and he was looking at the celestial well, (which is the gateway between earth and Nimbo.) The angel had long white hair, white shiny skin, deep and powerful green eyes, and beautiful white angel wings, he was wearing a white robe, and he had a sword. Even though it didn’t look like it, his other form is human; he was Gaber’s Gak caper grandson.

-“My name is Angel Namus. I’m second guardian in command after Sika. I welcome you all to the Nimbo sacred Main palace.”




Melissa asked him why they haven’t seen him before if he is truly the second guardian in command after Sika. He told her that now that her son is the second guardian, he’s a second guardian of the same class, but in the Archangel king Palace (The Archangel king is the king of nimbo, but the guardians and god are still superior.)

-“I think my mother mentioned something about you before. I don’t remember very well since I hardly pay attention to those long stories.”

Michelle approached Angel Namus carefully, she was curious and wanted to touch his wings, but Angel Namus quickly detected her.

“Water Acolyte, Don’t you dare touch my wings!”

Michelle quickly stepped back. Sika and Siran arrived to the main palace; they were surprised that the acolytes arrived so early at nimbo.

“Since we arrived early, could you help us find Diana?” Daniel asked.

“Find her? Don’t you all live in the same town?” Siran asked the children.

“Yes, we do. But she’s gone. She disappeared last night! Daniel called her to her house and her mother told him that she went out and never came back.” Michelle explained to Siran.

“Tell us about her, Sika! From where does she come from? Is it true what Daniel told us about She’s a descendant of Gaber’s Gak enemy! Pablo SenBendinks?” Melissa asked.

“Sadly, it’s true what Daniel told you all.”
“That explains her compulsive behavior on battle and why she didn’t let the emperor finish talking. She didn’t want us to know that she comes from a family of darkness.”

Siran agreed with Melissa, but also explained to her that the Senbendinks family is no longer evil, but they all carry inside the darkness of their ancestors. The Shadows of their family past are still around haunting them. While Siran explained, suddenly the skies on Nimbo darkened; it looked like a storm was approaching.
Suddenly it started to rain on Nimbo something that hasn’t happened in more than twenty centuries. Everyone was surprised by the sudden rain. Angel Namus looked at the skies, and said:
-“There hasn’t been rain on Nimbo like this since the saga of heroes Eternal III! That was when…”
Michelle quickly asked him what happened in that Saga of Heroes. Angel Namus at first was trying to evade the subject, but then he decided to give a clear answer and explanation to Michelle.

-“The Eternal Nuclear Acolyte was turned evil in the Saga of Heroes Eternal III, when that Occurred it started to rain.”
Michelle asked him if it meant that the emperor returned as an evil acolyte or if he created it’s own. Angel Namus told her the truth:

“It’s Diana! She has turned to the other side…” Angel Namus lowered his wings and head as he told it to Michelle and the acolytes; they were all surprised by that. Sika agreed with what Angel namus said. Siran didn’t sense any change between the good and evil axis so he was a little skeptical about it.

“How could she turn evil so soon? The darkness within her was strong, but not strong enough to turn her to the other side.”

“My son, There’s still a lot of stuff that you yet can’t sense since your powers are only beginners ones. But I can assure you that Diana is no longer on our side…”

Daniel refused to believe that she was evil he said, he just couldn’t believe that her friend, the girl that he loves the most has become evil.

“She’s my friend and I love her! The girl I love can’t be an evil acolyte!” Daniel fell on his knees and started to cry and kept shouting those words. Michelle decided to be the one to talk to him.

“I know it’s hard to have the person you love the most as your enemy, but you got to be strong. You can’t let your feelings for her get in the way of the reality and your duties.”

Daniel’s stood up, although he was till crying. Then he asked to Michelle:

“Michelle, have you ever been in love? Have you ever faced the reality that the person that you love the most has turned against you? YOU DON’T UNDERSTAND!”

Michelle slapped Daniel on the face and said to him:

“Yes, I have suffered! I saw with my own eyes how my first love attacked everyone and everything he saw. I also saw when my dad had to kill him! Everything was fine till one day… It all changed! Suddenly he became evil and started to blast everything away putting in danger everyone on the school. That’s when my dad (he was a maximum warrior back them) Shot him in the head right in front of the whole school! That’s why I was transferred to our current school, where I met you all!” Michelle began to cry as well
Daniel cleaned his and her tears and understood that he wasn’t the only one with love issues. Then Melissa asked to Sika if they should find Diana to confirm their suspicions, Sika and Siran said that there’s no doubt that she’s evil, but if they wanted to confirm it they should go to their school (Or what remains of the school.) and wait there because probably she’ll return there to attract the acolytes attention. Siran teleported the acolytes back to the school. There was silence everywhere, the school was like a desert, Abandoned, quiet and dead.


“She’s not here! That ##### better shows up here!”
Suddenly the skies darkened. The day became night in just a matter of minutes; the acolytes could fell the evil that surrounded the dark skies. The school lights activated themselves (since they thought it was night.) A shadowy figured appeared on the roof of the school. The acolytes decided to morph, just in case the figure decided to attack. Daniel got curious and decided to ask something to the shadowy figure.

“Who are you? Show me your face and stop hiding within those shadows!”

The shadowy figured stood there, staring at the acolytes without saying a single word. Daniel decided to make an attack to see if it could call the attention of the shadowy figure, but the mysterious figure evaded the attack and at that exact moment Daniel was struck by a lighting bolt. He fell on his knees, with his eyes wide open. Michelle and Melissa got scared by it, and checked Daniel to see if he was alive. Luckily he was still alive just received a critical hit. The shadowy figured abandoned his shadowy form, and introduced himself to the acolytes.

“My name is Reneus! I’m the one that sent the emperor to haunt dimensions! I’m glad to finally meet the heroes that defeated one of my strongest soldiers! But why this planet uses three ten year old children as their line of defense?”

“We’re the acolytes sent to defend this world that god created and Jesus died for! We were chosen because of our ties to the past legendary unlimited Gaktianamus acolytes.”

“That’s an Interesting story, Gak acolyte! But I have a question for you...”

Melissa was surprised that Reneus wanted to ask her something, so she told him:

“Ask away!”

“Would you three kill one of your own if it became evil, would you kill it Even if you love that person more than yourselves?”

Michelle and Melissa were a little surprised and were wondering why Reneus asked the question, so they asked him why he wanted to know such a crucial question. Then Reneus decided to forget about the question and introduce one of his newest additions to his Team and Out of the shadows of the night, Diana stepped into the light. With a smile on her face she said to Reneus:

“I’m here to serve you, my master! What do you want me to do for you?”
Melissa immediately reacted to Diana’s appearance. She shouted to Diana:

“I always knew you weren’t worthy of being an acolyte!”


Diana ignored Melissa and Reneus ordered Diana to morph and show them how strong she really is now that she’s on the darkness side.
-“As you wish, my master! Dark Solar acolyte powers, Morph!”

The whole sky became day again, the temperature rose and the light of the day was so bright that it was blinding. Diana’s body was covered by the shining solar light. When she finished morphing she said:
-“Powerful star of life! Dark Gaktianamus Acolyte!”

After the morphing was completed the skies turned dark again. Michelle decided to try to wake up Daniel so he could see what was happening. She slapped him on the face multiple times to try to snap him out of his unconsciousness but it didn’t work. So she used her mini bubbles to wake him up. He woke up, opened his eyes slowly, and when he saw Diana morphed right by the side of Reneus he stood up quickly and said:

“Diana! What the hell are you doing with him?”

“She’s an ungrateful #####! I said it once and I will say it again: She’s not worthy of the acolyte power. The girl you love so much has become evil! This time you can’t defend her from any insults or from getting wounded because this time she deserves it!”
Daniel ran quickly towards Diana and said to her:

“You’re not supposed to be with him! You’re supposed to be at our side!”

“Nuclear acolyte, I’m Stronger, Happier, and more beautiful than ever! Now Get out of my way! Solar energy blast!”

Diana shot him with a full blast of her solar energy, he landed against some trees. Michelle was getting a little nervous about the solar power that Diana had. It was stronger than it was before. Then Reneus got a bottle of wine (God knows from where he got that bottle.) he got a wine glass and decided to have a toast.

“Let’s toast for Diana’s almighty arrival to the dark side! She will be a great soldier for my army! I also want to toast for…”
Melissa got mad and decided to shoot Reneus before he could finish his toast.
-“Shut the #### up! Light beam!”
The light beam destroyed the wine glass and blew Reneus hand away. He started to bleed badly.

“Ah! You #####! This isn’t over yet! Diana, Take care of them! I want them all dead! This time you can’t win Gaktianamus acolytes, because this time you met with your match!”
Reneus disappeared into the shadows. As always Diana followed the orders she was given. She started to attack the acolytes. Meanwhile Daniel was watching the battle and thinking about what he needed to do. He dint’ know what to do; although his friends were evading all attacks, Diana still had the advantage. But they weren’t able to keep up for long! Diana decided to use the fast teleportation to shot her solar blast at Michelle and Melissa, they were wounded badly. Daniel quickly had to make a decision.

“I have to do the right thing! Forgive me!”
Daniel aimed carefully at Diana and shot her with his nuclear energy attack, it sent her flying. But while she was blasting away she said that she will return to take revenge.
Daniel was able to get up and ran to check on Melissa and Michelle they were alive but badly wounded. Melissa and Michelle started to talk to Daniel about what just happened, even though the both of them are in critical condition, they still wanted to tell him their points of view.

“Daniel, did you see what that ##### did? I was always right about her... “

“Prepare to fight her! She’s now our enemy even if I hate to see her like that.”

“Michelle, why do you care about her?” Melissa asked her.
-“You got to admit that no one deserves a fate like that… Not even her... and besides even if she’s a “#####” like you say she is she still doesn't deserve that fate...”

“I like the way you talk, Michelle! But I love Diana… I can’t fight her!”

Melissa, Michelle and Daniel kept debating each other about the issue and five minutes later the skies cleared up. Little after the skies cleared up, the train from Nimbo arrived and it landed right in front of the acolytes.

“Watch it! You almost squashed us with the train!”

“Sorry about almost running you all over with the train, Gak Acolyte, the train brakes need a little fixing.”

“Diana became evil and now I’m being force to choose between my love for her and my acolyte duty! What should I do?”

“I’m not your guardian or anything but I still say that you need to punish her! Stop her before it’s too late!”

“Finally someone agrees with me!”
“Why is everybody thinking like Melissa does? Can you think as Michelle does?”

“Actually Daniel… Even though I hate killing my friends, she needs to die.”

Strike 12: Killing Diana is the only choice! Enter the dynamic trio!

It’s been three days since the last conflicts (its Friday already.) and everything is unusually calm especially when an evil G